高考英语满分作文解析及写作素材积累：2015年高考满分作文(5)

1. 描述画面； 2. 概述其含义； 3. 谈谈个人感想。

注意：

1. 短文开头已给出，不计入总词数； 2. 可适当发挥，使文章内容充实、行文连贯； 3. 短文中不能出现考生的具体信息。 参考词汇：凿，钻：bore

In the picture______________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【写作指导】

本题为看图写作，主题是古时候的一则成语“凿壁偷光”。注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当，同时要尽量保持简洁精干的内容，不拖泥带水。要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，应用文写作对于文章内容的要求是要达到写作目的。尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。

1.第一段描述图画内容。描述图画内容时，可采用一般过去时。

2.第二段概述图画含义。概述其含义时可采用一般过去时和一般现在时。 3.第三段谈个人感想。本段需用一般现在时态。 【参考范文】

In the picture, we can see a boy in worn clothes, sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it. A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.

This is a well-known story from an ancient Chinese idiom. The boy, being poor, couldn’t afford even a candle, so he bored a hole in the wall to \ort to acquire knowledge and never get discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.

Of course, things are totally different today. It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts. Hard work pays off. We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get prepared for the future. 【亮点分析】

文章第一段描述图片，第一句中用到了动词ing形式的非谓语动词做伴随状语和with 的复合结构In the picture, we can see a boy in worn clothes, sitting at a shabby wooden table with a pile of books on it.图中我们可以看见一个男孩穿着破旧的衣服坐在一个堆满书的桌子旁边。A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.一丝微弱的光亮从墙上的一个小洞穿过，他沉静在自己的阅读中。第二段第一句开始说这个图片的主题。This is a well-known story from ancient Chinese idiom.这是一个众人周知的中国古代成语。第二句也是用了一个分词结构表示伴随状语The boy, being poor, couldn’t afford even a candle, so he bored a hole in the wall to “steal” light from his neighbour’s house to read at night.这个贫穷的男孩甚至不能够买得起一根蜡烛，于是他把墙凿了一个洞，从他邻居那里偷了一些光在夜晚阅读。第二段最后一句用了一个no matter引导的让步状语从句。The moral of the story is spare no effort to acquire knowledge and never get discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.故事的精神是要不遗余力的获取知识，并且不管有多么困难的情况从不轻易气馁。第三段结束Of course, things are totally different today .当然，现在可完全不同了。第二句是一个not… but 结构以及宾语从句It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.不是这个故事本身而是这个故事反映出来的东西才是重要的。俗语：Hard work pays off.功夫不负有心人。We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get prepared for the future.我们应该带着苦来通过学习来改进自己并且为未来做准备。

10.2015年四川卷

假如你是李夏。你看到美国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴，希望有人能帮助她提高普通话(Mandarin)水平，她可以教英语作为回报。请根据以下提示用英语给她写一封电子邮件。

1. 表达给她提供帮助的意愿； 2. 说明你能胜任辅导的理由；

3. 给出讲好普通话的两点建议； 4. 提出你学习英语的具体需求。 注意：

1. 词数120左右，开头语已为你写好； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3. 文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称； Hi，Sharon，

This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.

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Li Xia

【写作指导】

考查提纲类作文。提纲作文在写作时需要注意以下几个方面：首先需要审题。即：审要求、审文体、审人称、审时态。其次，考生要能够抓住中心，列要点，列出写作提纲。写作文时，一定要切题，抓住中心，紧扣要点。然后在体裁明确、中心突出、要点清晰的前提下，考生应该选择自己最熟悉、最有把握的词语、句型，将要点逐条表达出来。最后根据要点选词组句，然后按照篇章结构连句成篇。本篇文章的要点具体，可分为三段写，第一段写要点1、2；第二段写要点3；第三段写要点4以及希望得到对方的回信。

1.在写作时使用第一人称，时态主要包括一般过去时、一般现在时和一般将来时。 2.内容要点：

(1)向Sharon表达帮助她学习普通话的意愿； (2)说明自己能胜任的理由； (3)给出讲好普通话的两点建议； (4)提出自己学习英语的具体需求。 【参考范文】 Hi，Sharon，

This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.I am more than willing to lend a helping hand to you.

I am convinced I can perfectly live up to your expectation. I have such a good command of Mandarin that not only was I elected the broadcaster of the radio station of our schoo1，but I also won the second prize in the Mandarin Contest held

in our city last year. When it comes to improving Mandarin，my advice is that you should listen to Mandarin every day and practice speaking it whenever possible. Just as the saying goes，practice makes perfect.

By the way，I do hope you can help me improve my English writing ability，especially the proper use of vocabulary and some important grammar.

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